Fic: Back - R/L - NC-17 - part 1 of 6

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Title: Back - part 1 of 6
Authors: roadstergal and kahvi
Pairings: Rimmer/Lister
Rating: NC-17, for explicit sex and adult themes. Please note this.
Disclaimer: We do not own them, and we make no money from this. Just a whole lot of fun!
Note: Yes, it's Gestalt-time! This story follows on from, and is based in the same universe as my Heart, and roadstergal's Annoyance and The Way. You may wish to read those first. :)

No way in Hades had Kryten sounded Vaguely Brownish-Purple Alert for a shower.

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[laurenthemself]

Oh. My. Gods.

Wow.

You guys win the fandom.

[lady-draco.livejournal.com]

*bobs up and down* Now I know why I came to work reeeeeeeeallllllly early. Whee!!!

Right - reading time. =)

[noirenails.livejournal.com]

*squeals excitedly* OMG Gestalt fic :D Good to be able to read new fanfiction so often, especially as I've been shamefully absent in the RD fandom for some days? Weeks? Ah well, who cares. Fic!

There was nothing wrong with just landing.
*titters at the famous last words*

With a small noise, almost like a yelp, Lister grabbed hold of that impossible dead man and very abruptly drew him into a bone-crushing hug. He felt like Rimmer, too. His Rimmer. Smelled like him, even, ghastly after-shave and all. "Thank God!"
*heart breaks*in a good way*

"Yer alive..."
"Not really."
Heeheehee, oh how I love them <3

"Clothes..." Rimmer repeated, weakly.
*coos*

"Ever since we," Rimmer made a vague hand gesture to communicate sex, "I've been a little" he made another hand gesture to indicate confusion and a little neurotic worry. That was a lot to cram in a gesture, but Rimmer decided that he had pulled it off rather well. Lister certainly seemed interested enough. "And then when you" Rimmer pointed in the direction of the landing bay, waving his hand in what he hoped was a suitably wavy DJ-shippy manner, "I felt a little," Rimmer whipped his hand about. "So I decided I should come back and," Rimmer tried to make a hash-things-out-to-catharsis hand gesture. "You know."
Oh god, I'm in love with that paragraph :D

*whimpers at Rimmer's nervousness and gentleness and... everything*

*...whimpers also at one of the most erotic kissing scenes that she has ever read*

*soon followed by the feeling of OMGWTF*
*understanding, snort*I like to use asterisks*

*OMGWTF again, nooooooo*

Gah, that was intriguing! And I'm really confused now. Can't wait for more, really :)

[pikapal101.livejournal.com]

Eeeeeeep!!! I am totally, absolutely, without DOUBT in *LOVE* with this fic!!
So much detail, so many twists and turns! I looooove it!
You must write me more! More, I say!

Much, much love to you both!!
<3333

[eviltigerlily.livejournal.com]

Ah... *nods in fake understaning* Sinister. Good.

He had made a list. Damn it, he should have brought the list. It was so neat and orderly!

Aww Rimsy! *snuggles him* The hand gestures bit was great. Not only was it funny and adorable, like everyon else said, but Rimmerhands gesturing, flying about through the air... *is distracted*
You've certainly got me hooked. Now on with the story!

Better Late then Never. :)

[typhonblue.livejournal.com]

‘"Sir, I need you to go fetch Mr. Lister! Nothing... erm... nothing... dangerous or anything. No. No indeed. I just..." his voice synthesizers put in a slight note of panic, "need you to go get Mr. Lister right now." Perhaps there was still hope. Kryten had to believe that, or he'd go completely to nuts and bolts.’

For some reason changing to Kryten’s PoV really jarred me here.

Also, the scene where Rimmer comes in on Lister taking a shower (or not taking a shower) is confusing.

When we shift from Rimmer noticing Lister to Lister musing to himself, it is confusing. It’s almost like the story goes back in time for a bit, *prior* to Rimmer entering the room.

Shouldn’t Lister notice Rimmer as soon as Rimmer says, "Oh! Er, I...” When I read the paragraph after that I thought Lister had noticed Rimmer and was considering asking Rimmer to help hold his towel up, which would be a strange thing to ask an intimate partner who’d just come back from a long trip.

I think the switching back and forth for the “I haven’t seen the lover I kicked out of my life in ages” meeting and reaction is confusing. Perhaps you should stick to one?

‘Oh, is that what the man wanted to know. Rimmer leaned close, hissing in his own voice, "Yes, it's smegging me."’ I like this. I’m not sure why, but I can absolutely see Rimmer doing it.

‘Moisture fell from his lashes onto his face, irritating his eyes.’If it’s falling from his lashes onto his face, why is it irritating his eyes?

‘"Because... you..." Rimmer sighed and dropped the Ace voice. "Look, this is one of the things I came back to talk about." He had made a list. Damn it, he should have brought the list. It was so neat and orderly! Every thought he had about this topic was laid out in the proper order of discussion, with relevant subheadings for more in-depth discussion. He was so sure he would remember it without the hard copy! But no, Lister had driven it right out of his mind. Maybe he should go back and get the thing.” Hehe. Very nice.

‘"No, no." Rimmer grabbed the subject eagerly. He knew about reality bubbles. They were common across the dimensions - as minefields, as defensive weapons, as offensive weapons, as an interrogation tactic. Rimmer knew his smegging reality bubbles inside-out.” Again, much liking.

‘"Tell me Arn, go on." Lister's voice was dead. "Tell me there's a way to explain this. You were always good at explaining things. Aliens. Tell me it's aliens."’ Hehe, so Arn.