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[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

This is a quickie (in every way...). :p I wrote it under the influence of the morning-after conversation from Legion, which always seemed a bit suggestive to me. R/L. It's a rough draft, so critique, while always welcome, is more welcome than usual.

Perfect In Every Detail.

Comments

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

OK, first of all, that was really, really good! I'm fanning myself here... Phew! The plot is perfect. I did note a few stylistic/language things that you could polish to get the thing even shinier. Would you mind if I e-mailed them to you? Or would you prefer that I posted them here? I feel kinda rude pointing thing out, not being a native English speaker, but since you asked, well... *shuffles feet*

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

No, not rude at all, pul-lease email them along to me! I put my addy at the top of all of my fics.

[roxulasbride.livejournal.com]

oh that's perfect!

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

*blush* Thanks!

I changed it around a bit as per kahvi's commentary, and re-uploaded it with the same name.

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Oooh... Must check it out then! *does so*