Fic: Breaking The Chain, Part 2. R/L. PG-13.

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Title: Breaking The Chain
Authors: kahvi & roadstergal
Pairing: Rimmer/Lister
Rating: PG-13 (for this part).
Parts: 4
Disclaimer: We don't own Red Dwarf or make any money at all from it, more's the pity.
Spoilers: Pretty much everything. Set post-VIII.
Notes: If you haven't read Part I, start there.

Sure there's not a bit of Cat in you?

Comments

[eviltigerlily.livejournal.com]

Oooooohhh, story :P

The entire ceiling had been scrubbed clean, sprayed with pine-scented air-freshener, and whitewashed

ROFL *ahem* Oh yes, nothing wrong here, 'sall just perfectly normal thank you.

"My butter is..." his voice cracked. He caught it. "Bread isn't buttered... er... the side with the bread..." Wasn’t there a bloody phrase to use in this context?

My lord that was funny! The whole concept is great by the way, but this line is just...*shakes head* Poor Rimsy...He is just too cute when he's all confused and backed into a corner like this.

He bade a regretful farewell to his sex drive

Yes, indeed, poor thing.

Rimmer would eat his wig

You've used this a few times now, I think it's a lovely line.

Miss... er... Computer, ma'am

Yeeaaaahhhh

slightly nervously wondering if his boots would polish themselves if he kept them on the floor long enough

Hahaha, so Lister. And, yeah, scary.

Yes, very scary indeed. I *ahem* appologize for the lengty comments but there are so many great bits. Again the Computer was great - completely f**** insane. I love the idea that as inasne as Kryten has gone he wouldn't actually intentionally hurt Rimmer.
Alternate Rimmer is just so eerie, the tension there is palpable (don't wanna even contemplate what he has really done to his shipsmates, nope, my mind not going there at all).
Way to end on a cliffhager! Evil *hisses at you* More please?

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Appologize for lengthy comments?!? Hell no, we love those! Or at least I do; I can't imagine roadstergal thinks any different. :D

Speaking of C, she does write an AMAZING Computer, doesn't she? I'm going to be bold enough and claim credit for having come up with the basic seed of an idea for this story, but she just took it and ran with it, turning it into pure distilled amazing. Ness. Amazingness.

It's hard to know how to divide these things sometimes, but I always suggest upping the tension by adding cliffhangers. ;) Alternate Rimmer gave me the creeps too - that action sequence was hella-fun to write!

Thank ye kindly, glad you're enjoying it. :)

[eviltigerlily.livejournal.com]

Oh, I forgot to mention, The moment between Rimmer and Lister in Lister's quarters was just so, SO smegging beautiful! The Computer must Die! Stuip, meddling, whacked out pice of junk...*wanders of mumbling*

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Heh, why do you think Lister swore? ;)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Oh, she enjoyed the effect. :)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Oh, no, I like lengthy comments! :D Yes, kahvi came up with a terrific idea for this, and we just ran with it. :) The Computer is great fun - it's almost like a meaty villan, but not quite. I do like her.

Oh, yes, more to come! :D