Ficlet - Ace. Rimmer/Lister. PG

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

I dunno quite where this came from, but it came rather abruptly as one whole story. Spoilers for Polymorph II: Emohawk. I am always grateful for concrit.

"I'm not Ace Rimmer, Davey-boy."

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[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Thank you for writing exactly what went through my mind as I re-watched the end of "Emohawk" through slasher eyes!

It was as if he had owned a car for all of his life, and had just finally discovered what the wiper blades would do.
I love this metaphore.

Lister grabbed his arm and pulled him towards the sleeping quarters, betraying nervousness.
*swoons at the images of nervous Lister*

"Didn't think I had it in me, old chum?" Rimmer asked with a smile.
This is very good - emphasising that A: this isn't actually Ace, or rather, not the original Ace - it's Rimmer's Ace potential. It's part of him.

I offered to meet him in my room, covered in curry paste, after he finished sewing Cat up. He acted like he was expectin' it."
Hurrah! *gets unreasonably excited and happy*

He slowly raised his fist and bit down on it, hard.
How Rimmer is this? Wonderful.

His light-bee gave off a resounding clonk as it bounced off of the wall, dragging him reluctantly back into the room.
Excellent! I like my porn science fiction to make sense!

He hit the offending member hard, to teach it a lesson.
Oh dear...

This made me really happy, for some reason. Probably because it's good. ;)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Yay for Kahvi!feedback! :D

I usually waffle a bit over the ending to my fics, but this one just came on as a whole, so my issue was more filling out the details in getting from how I knew I wanted it to start to how I knew I wanted it to end. :p Glad you liked it!