ext_45940 ([identity profile] roadstergal.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] reddwarfslash2006-05-15 01:16 am
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Ficlet - Fault. Implied R/L. PG.

Ach, [livejournal.com profile] kahvi had to ask how Rimmer would feel afterwards...

Sequel to Medicine.

"Look, why are you actin' like it's my fault?"

Concrit always appreciated; even more so, if possible, when I write Lister. I had to - Rimmer isn't talking to me right now. :p

Rereading it, I can see some influence of Kahvi's Why, too.

Edit - Okeedokee - mild revisions done as per concrit suggestions. :)

[identity profile] eviltigerlily.livejournal.com 2006-05-15 04:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Mmmmm, lovely :)

Lister concentrated hard on his comic book. He had read the dialog bubble three times without understanding a word, and he was determined to actually move to the next one after the fourth rereading. Oh. 'Die now.' That was pretty straightforward.

*sniger*

He continued to read, glancing up now and then to judge Rimmer's mood. He glanced at those lips, and wondered if Cat had kissed them.

Lister rather liked the idea that he had not.


Ah, yes, the perfect ending. *sigh*
More?

[identity profile] kahvi.livejournal.com 2006-05-15 05:50 pm (UTC)(link)
Hehehe... I inspired fic! Hurrah!

"...I got fucked by a cat?"
*winces in sympathy*

Great Cat. And great Cat-nicknames; I always find those hard to make up. :)

Lister's thoughts throughout: Excellent. I particularly liked the curiositiy tinged with disgust, and his confusion as to how those emotions fitted together.

"Waiting to use the AR machine while you finish having sex is like waiting in line for the bathroom behind my brothers. Frustrating and pointless, and I might as well pee out of the window."
I loved this. I can totally see it!

I've matured, like.
Boy, I can't wait 'til June, when I turn 28! Maturity City, here I come!

Oooh - hopeful ending! That's what Lister does for ya. He's a sweetie, isn't he?

Sent you some minor thoughts, but they are just that; thoughts, and minor. That is, I will be sending them after posting this. ;)

Well done!

[identity profile] lady-draco.livejournal.com 2006-05-16 10:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee! I don't know how I missed this the other day. Blind as a bat, I suppose.

Raging!Rimmer - what a hot image. Hee. Swearing!Rimmer is also hot. *grins*

Good job, mate. I know, piddly comment but my mother is bellowing out to me to do something. Will there be a third story? *looks hopeful*

[identity profile] queen-fiend.livejournal.com 2008-08-04 05:14 am (UTC)(link)
Lovely sequel. :)

"Terrific. That's all I need. To be totty for everyone on the ship with a penis." *snort*

And I love "misplaced-underarm-hair!"