OK, first of all, that was really, really good! I'm fanning myself here... Phew! The plot is perfect. I did note a few stylistic/language things that you could polish to get the thing even shinier. Would you mind if I e-mailed them to you? Or would you prefer that I posted them here? I feel kinda rude pointing thing out, not being a native English speaker, but since you asked, well... *shuffles feet*
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Date: 2006-02-04 12:24 am (UTC)