Fic: Cleanup, Part 2. PG.

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

The second bit.

This is the nuttiest plan I've heard all week.

Crit is always good. Written for fanfic100. Little Damn Table.

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[zekkass.livejournal.com]

The cockroaches made sure that no humans remained.

So the ants did take over, as Rimmer predicted in Season I? Dude. Cool.

Rather, it was not surprising that he sneered, but that he sat on the table.

...Why does this image haunt me? Mmm. Guh.

"That wasn't A, either," Rimmer said, peeking around Lister, "but it did seem to work."

Pfft. My lord. *falls over laughing*

"Yeh taste like toothpaste,"

This entire scene was adorable. I'm still curious as to what those sex aid chips do.

Lister sighed and turned back to the bottle of turps. At least it had gotten the mustache off.

And bam. Bitter ending. Awww. Poor Lister. Poor Rimmer. Have 'em shag tomorrow night?

I liked this. :)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Oh, I was just trying to get the mental image of Rimmer playing with a knobby thing that he thinks it's a weapon, but it turns out to be a dildo... purile, I know.

I wanted the end to segue decently into Out Of Time. I'm weird, but I think that Morale Officer scene was very slashy. Rimmer dwells on Lister - and Lister loses it, laughing. The whole tenor of the scene, to me, was a closeness that is just close to the point of abrasion...

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Oh my. Your Lister is smoldering hot. Phew. *fans self*

"Erm... we're not Simulants," Lister replied to the polite, cheerful, angular head on the comm-screen. "I'm human, and he's a Cat."
He's so cute! :D

Lister pulled his jacket and long johns apart to show his chest.
Guh. This fic is trying to kill me. And I think I like it. (Did I just lick my lips at work? o_O)

"The only problem with that is that someone is going to have to convince me that he is, first."
Funny man. :p

He picked up his guitar and sat on the midsection table. Come on, baby, he thought, stroking it. Get us out of this.
So hot. So my boy. But, you know, with your flavoring. Erm. That sounded odd. But I'm in a odd kind of place. ;)

Mechanoid piercings - hillarious!

"Ar," said the first one, in a smooth, cultured accent. "Prepare to be boarded, sirs. Good evening!"
Aw, so cute!

Well, I think we've firmly established that Rimmer is not Chris. I can't tell if a chord is an A. Not that I'm an expert, but people do pay me to sing. I suppose you could say that people pay Chris to sing too (hell, I would), but for entirely different reasons.

and gotten to the state of inebriation that had landed him on Red Dwarf in the first place.
Nice.

leaving his chest bare to the navel.
Glargh... And this whole sequence, up to the end - Rimmer and the boot - all of it - fan-smegging-tastic!

Thanks for making my morning. :)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Oooh, I'm glad you liked my Lister. :) Yes, Rimmer's a smeghead. Stop the press.

I just got stuck on the idea of mechanoid space pirates. Polite, civilized, clean, and arrrr!

Oh, he was just being a smeghead again - Lister's guitar was out of tune, so it just sounded like a jangly mess, not any chord at all. But the story is from Lister's POV, so of course the guitar sounds lovely to him - he only notes the negative reactions of Cat and Rimmer. Peasants.

Yaay! Thanks for the feedback.

[kahvi.livejournal.com]

Hehehe... "Arr", but pronounced in upper-class RP, which doesn't have rothic "r"'s. That made me giggle. Because it would be "aaaah", wouldn't it? So cute!

Oh right, of course! I tend forget that it's Lister POV, because it's so close to my own, so I didn't even consider narrator reliability. ;)

[eastpath.livejournal.com]

I quite liked this two parter :) It felt well written, and the voices sounded good :)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Thank you for the feedback! Glad you liked.

[ekisa-himani.livejournal.com]

Great part 2, I especially like the last part and the lovely characterisation of all the characters. Give yourself a pat on the back.

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

*twists* *cracks something* Ahhhh.

Thanks muchly! Glad you liked.

[day221b.livejournal.com]

I loved this. The use of Lister's guitar was fab! I so love reading your stories. It amazes me that when reading your dialogue between the characters that you are always able to make your story sound like a lost episode from the series. The characterizations are spot on.

Well done!

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

*blush* Thank you very much! Glad you liked. :)

[eviltigerlily.livejournal.com]

Is that what that was? I thought it was the death cry of an anally raped hyena

I nearly fell of the chair at that one.

Have Lister serenade the pirates to death?

Makes perfect sense to me Arn, if anyone can do that it's Lister.

"Ar," said the first one, in a smooth, cultured accent. "Prepare to be boarded, sirs. Good evening!"

Wonderful! As is the whole idea of mechanoid pirates. I love the description of them too.
The instant drunkness chips are a great idea, though it doesn't really guarnatee you won't regret it in the morning. The midsection scene was great. Bittersweet and sexy. And damnit, the one time Rimmer is drunk enough to actually be talking about important things, Lister is watching him make funny faces! The final scene is just sad.

Lister sighed and turned back to the bottle of turps. At least it had gotten the mustache off

If only I had Lister's optimism, my life would be so much easier. He really can see some good in every situation.

[eviltigerlily.livejournal.com]

Oh, and it does rather work as an episode (except that bits that, you know, would never be in an episode, but they're yummy).

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Oh, yes - Kryten was only referring to the hangover aspect and (I tried to imply) the impotence-from-too-much.

"Chirpy gerbil-faced optimism." Oh, yes. That's Lister. "We'll get through this!" :D

Thanks for the feedback! Glad you liked.

[thoraarwin.livejournal.com]

It's so hard to pick my fave moments, but I'll try anyway:-) The Cat one-liners:

"Fifth life-form?"

"I think he means your sock basket, bud." (Heh-heh. Just like in an episode.)

And the interaction between Rimmer and Lister: "No, no, really! I'm human, see?" Lister pulled his jacket and long johns apart to show his chest. (God. What visuals.*thud*)

"Stunning plan, Lister - make them too ill to fight," Rimmer muttered. So very Rimmer! Great job!*g* Even the ending.*sniffle*

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Aww, thank you muchly! Glad you liked. They're fun to write.

[kirstyfromflat5.livejournal.com]

Brilliant. I love it when Lister and Rimmer get drunk! Great stuff :)

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

There are many good bits in the series that are drunk bits; I try not to overuse it, but it's quite tempting. Rimmer really does seem to get a little less smeggy and a little more honest when he's drunk (Me Squared and Thanks For The Memory leap to mind - and ah, if Ackerman hadn't interrupted...).

Thanks for the feedback!

[kirstyfromflat5.livejournal.com]

That's true...drunk Rimmer always makes me laugh. Probably Thanks For The Memory the most. And we all know that the real reason that Lister doesn't want to know how many times Rimmer has made love is cause he'll be overcome with jealousy ;)