Contemplation (G)

[tsukinobun.livejournal.com]

A response drabble to "Fate" from Rimmer's POV.
Not sure how I feel about this one. Some parts I love, others feel strange. What are your thoughts?

Contemplation (G)
Drabble : 100 words
Lister/Rimmer
Synopsis: What Rimmer's thinking as he looks at Lister during "Fate".

 

A moment's peace would be such relief.
You’re avoiding me. You feel it too.
I’m edging closer to more
desperate means
for the chance at one stolen kiss --
between loneliness and silence,
and glimpses into sad eyes.
I should give up pretending.

What I feel for you is destructive anyway.

Lister.
You must see

I’m a coward.
I can’t be the one to…initiate.

How many times have I almost said the words?

Sometimes I’m sure you hear, I think them so loudly;

you don’t flinch.

I imagine your lips are spiced petals

and you taste like a summer day.

 

Comments

[sadera992.livejournal.com]

nawh. sweet. who knew rimmer could be so poetic?

[dauphkantus.livejournal.com]

Oh, but remember the love letters to Caroline McClory?

Your eyes are like two limpid pools of loveliness
Your hair is like a golden waterfall
Plus those short skirts you wear make me really horny

;D

[tsukinobun.livejournal.com]

thanks for reminding me of that!
:) oh, priceless.

I hope he would never think the word "limpid" in regard to Lisy, though.

[dauphkantus.livejournal.com]

XD oh goodness, I hope not, for their sakes XDDD

[bobbybob87.livejournal.com]

Ooh I like this a lot! Maybe a little bit more than the one from Lister's POV even.
(and the love letters thing made me lol :D)

[telegramsam.livejournal.com]

Your icon is reaaally pretty. *stares*

Drabble's good too, btw. :P