Ficlet - Ace. Rimmer/Lister. PG

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I dunno quite where this came from, but it came rather abruptly as one whole story. Spoilers for Polymorph II: Emohawk. I am always grateful for concrit.

"I'm not Ace Rimmer, Davey-boy."

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[jargonelle.livejournal.com]

The only concrit-like-thing I'd say is that: 'Both, he supposed, and felt a slight embarrassment that, he is sure, would be alien to his alternate self.' - "He is sure" seems like a rather weird tense change, maybe it should have been "was"? (That caught my eye the first time and I had to reread that bit several times before I could make up my mind whether anything was wrong).

But other than that:

The contrast between Arn-as-Ace Arn and normal Arn is fantastic, you've really captured the difference in the whole tone of your writing.

"I don't want to say anything about my other selves - it just seems a bit impolite - but I believe I'm a bit less arrogant than the Ace you met. Not that he didn't have good reason to be full of himself," Rimmer added hastily. "Hell of a chap." - Hee! - and Rimmer was highly annoyed to note that one part of his body was very much enjoying his mental rehash of the previous night's events. He hit the offending member hard, to teach it a lesson. - Both are genius.

this suctioned Rimmer - this designation is perhaps the best one ever.

I'm fascinated by Ace: every incarnation of him, and this is a really great piece of characterisation.

[roadstergal.livejournal.com]

Many thanks for the concrit!

I agree - I'll make that change.